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>Jokes

What else do you propose should be done after the collapse? Kindly ask women to stop being traitors and sleeping with the enemy?
Yes, jokes. If your question is earnest, we should restore Christian civilization, treating women as European Christians have done throughout history.
 

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Dang, didn't know 30+ roasties were still considered rape-worthy
Some guys are


I ignored that guy


really silly accusations of being a fed



r women funny
No

he called me a bitch
Bitch
- a malicious, unpleasant, selfish person, especially a woman.

Yes


I can't get down with the tone of the misogyny on the DS, particularly the comments about 12 year olds being to blame for being sexually exploited by shitskins in the UK.
 

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Yes, jokes. If your question is earnest, we should restore Christian civilization, treating women as European Christians have done throughout history.
Ah, then women should be considered property. We agree then.
 

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Well, the only thing I disagree with is the fact that you seem to think most men can compete with robots in an automated society.

We can have a White Workforce, or we can have automation, but we can't have both.

We're going to have to dismantle the entire production line in order to get our jobs back.
 

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1.) Tell us what we can do for "the movement" or to affect politics/culture.

You tell us a lot about how we can improve ourselves in our personal lives with women, diet and exercise, move out of the city, etc. But very little about how we can potentially help the broader political and cultural situation. There used to be talk of flier campaigns, troll storms, how to engage normies on forums like Reddit, what tactics and strategies to use, etc. More of that would be much appreciated as without it, the majority of the news on the site comes across as a major Black-Pill. Hearing about all of the cultural degeneration going on all around us and feeling like there's nothing we can do about it becomes demoralizing after a while. How can we spread the message?

2.) Remind people of the basics of the JQ and race-realism.

You do a great job of explaining the intricacies and underlying biological/evolutionary causes for the women problem. But lately have been just glossing over the underlying causes of the Jewish problem and the racial issues as if you're speaking only to us OGs. Novices who visit here may still think the problem with blacks and Hispanics is solely one of "culture" and they just need to be assimilated more so that they'll get better. Their understanding of the JQ may just be "Jews tend to be very liberal, they cucks." I know it may seem pretty 2014, but I think you should still be continually drilling people on Jared Taylor style race science and the "bell curve" and all that, as well as explaining the causes. Of the JQ with Kevin MacDonald style biological/evolutionary approaches, and reminding people of the history between the Jews and civilization.

3.) Change the Tranny Watch banner.

You haven't had an article about trannies in like a week.

4.) Do better spellcheck/proofreading.

Small mistakes are common here. But they are on big news sites as well nowadays for some reason.
 

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I think its fair to say you have been proven right about IRL activities being all run by feds and counter productive. You were also one of like maybe five people that always called out covid as a fruad. But you still make comments about how we as a nation didn't do "something" when we should have about the covid lockdowns and Biden. If there was a window of opportunity we missed for a civil war or right wing rape death squads then that sucks. But You should write an article, an in depth one, about what we are suppose to personally do in our current situation. If its just move to the country and run for local office then there should be an actual discussion about how to do that.
 

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Part of the problem is obviously just the state of the news cycle, and the fact that I'm trying to avoid totally unadulterated doom-mongering (which is my instinct right now).
Denying what you know is right and what you’re passionate about

Feeling like writing is suffering

Hate to point out the obvious here but uhhhhh cmon man

This is also why it’s feelsbadman even though you’re writing is pretty damn good atm



Also don’t care for tranny watch thing.

As a father of a young and only son it’s my number one issue - having my son exposed from every angle they can muster is overwhelming to the point where it isn’t really feasible to cut him off from it completely without going into cult-like abuse territory, which gets me arrested and him out into that awful foster system and defeats the purpose.

Yet if he ever gives into the propaganda even if for a brief second, one little β€œmaybe I do feel like a girl a little bit sometimes”, he gets abducted and forcibly injected and mutilated by the state.

And yet even then having the site being β€œtranny watch” implies nothing here should be taken seriously.
 
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AA, iv been reading your articles on DS and TF for the better part of a decade and your evolution as a writer is obvious, the early days would have me laughing out loud with the humour, even when talking about something serious, some may call it shock humour but for people reading it in their 20's growing up through the late 90's and 2000's it wasnt really shocking, the n word wasnt taboo because hip hop was the music of choice for many, we were a generation that had been totally desensitised to violence, come on who remembers ogrish? And dont get me started on porn.
As you get older you start to realise you dont need to have humour in an article to get the subject matter across anymore as most members here are probably in or past their 30's now and have now set the political side their on, don't get me wrong humour doesnt detract from it but shouldn't be forced.
Recently iv found the longer articles mostly good regardless of its subject matter and well worthy of publication in any mainstream publication and surpassing what most of them publish today, you can tell that you have an interest/passion in what your writing about and it comes through.
The current news cycle is constant black pills for anyone thats informed about whats actually going on but for normies hearing about relaxing lockdown rules is like christmas every day.
I doubt there are many readers here that don't know enough about our chosen friends to gain a masters in the subject.
In these times a deep dive on the geopolitics around Biden's march against china is much more relevant and to me more interesting than the daily animal attacks in new york, biden gaff or trump hopium (you can get your fix of that from the forum as most stories make it there)
The ufo article was top notch by the way, i await the essay and the fitness book.

Obviously this is just my opinion, but you've evolved from a blogger to a journalist (a real one, not the corporate mouth pieces that mainly make up the profession now).
write about what you have a passion for, your struggling because you feel forced to write. Take a month away from writing the sites "fluff" pieces.
 
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But lately my writing hasn't been great, I don't think. I've been doing self-criticism/analysis and it seems to have peaked.
I read probably 90% of what you write and haven't noticed any systematic dropoff in quality. I guess you could be going through a little bit of a down cycle lately that I haven't really noticed but that'll happen from time to time, it's impossible to work at 100% efficiency 100% of the time. The only time your work really suffered was when you quit vaping for six months, and even then it was better than 99% of what passes for journalism in this country.

Also, I'm open to bringing back more edgy humor. I don't really want to do that, but maybe there's a way to do it that doesn't feel cringe.
I don't miss it tbqh, because your writing has maintained a sense of humor. You don't need to be "edgy" to be humorous.
 

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AA one other thing. With the basic news blurb commentary articles and filler, there are some fairly talented people here on the forum who can and would (and sometimes do) post threads that are very similar to the DS style, in the news section. If you had a thread or section for "article submissions," you might snare some good ones that need minimal editing or editorial contribution to publish. It could make for a stream of good filler so you can concentrate on the more important stuff. Just copy and paste them, edit as necessary.

Let us help, or at least try. Pick and choose what you like from the submissions.

I understand the importance of publishing content daily, how it keeps traffic up and how the bombardment of messaging forms minds and thus reality itself. I know from experience that editing poor articles is often worse than just writing them from scratch yourself, but I bet we could provide timely basic news stuff that is virtually ready to publish.
 

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I miss the esoteric themed articles you put out in 2019, I think you stopped writing them after going into Christianity more deeply. For me there is no conflict but then again many raised Christians do not tolerate anything besides Christianity.

I'm coming out in defense of "tranny watch" joke. It's my favorite joke this year. As for humor, humor only works if you find it funny yourself. If you don't find edgy humor entertaining it's probably not gonna be all that funny to readers either.

I can't get down with the tone of the misogyny on the DS, particularly the comments about 12 year olds being to blame for being sexually exploited by shitskins in the UK.
Ah that one really hit a nerve. I reacted by clutching pearls but then realized AA is right. Do I want to be nice or do I want to prevent 12 year olds from being raped? That's what I most appreciate about AA's work - it expands my thinking in a way that I could reach on my own wits.
 
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I don't start threads often, other than my article threads. I'm still going to finish the AMA I swear.

But lately my writing hasn't been great, I don't think. I've been doing self-criticism/analysis and it seems to have peaked.

Part of the problem is obviously just the state of the news cycle, and the fact that I'm trying to avoid totally unadulterated doom-mongering (which is my instinct right now).

I wanted to get some feedback from you all: what is good, what isn't good, what can be improved, topic suggestions, whatever.

For example, someone said they thought the recent article about that Jew Abramson trying to get Alex Jones arrested was too arduous. I can see that.

If you don't want to be negative, you can just say what you do like.

Also, I'm open to bringing back more edgy humor. I don't really want to do that, but maybe there's a way to do it that doesn't feel cringe.

I stopped with the edgy humor in large part because I don't want to become [REDACTED] or [REDACTED], who are two guys who are now in their 40s and 50s trying to do edgy stuff that was funny in the 1990s and now just comes across as pathetic.

Also, the fact is, I successfully pushed that stuff so hard that it was genuinely no longer shocking, which kind of defeated the point. There is a fed site that I won't link to that tried to rip off the use of racial slurs and then mix it with a neocon anti-Russia/China agenda, and I spent like an hour reading through it maybe a year and a half ago and was like "this is the worst thing I've ever seen." Aside from the fact it was pushing State Department talking points, it was 100% try-hard and 1000% cringe. So the slurs themselves are not just automatically funny anymore, and it largely feels like a dead meme.

However, being able to just say GAYNIGGER LOL was an easy goto for filler content.

The one thing that is still funny is talking about beating and raping women. That will always be shocking. But the ridiculous racist/Nazi stuff seems largely played out.

Oh, and I'm planning on doing some serious reading of old Christian material and writing about that, but that will just be a once a week thing probably (I'll likely publish Sundays and then collect it in book/pdf form).

I think some of the longer stuff is still pretty good, it's just the daily trudge that I'm struggling with.

I think I could hire some more people to do what Elvis/Snake are doing. Maybe they could do a better job than those two. For anyone who hasn't noticed, I write most of that text. They format the articles and sometimes add a few sentences. They only get paid a pittance. But it's not hard work.

Anyway, this post is becoming like a shitty article - so the thing: just give me some feedback. Don't be shy.
Someone once asked to find a website that ONLY covered facts and data that is easily digestable without any BS. How about you start doing filler content by focusing on a piece of stats and explaining its implications? Then gathering all of those fact posts under a list of fact posts? It would be useful as a reference resource. There's all kinds of golden nuggets here and there now but it's impossible to parse through all articles to find that one thing about issue X.

Maybe include some levity at the end to appeal to more readers?

Something like this:

REDPILL RAMMER


*insert a piece of scientific literature here*
(men's brains compared to women's brains for example)
*explain what it means for dummies*
(study shows women smol-brained lol)
*crack a joke or add a random funny picture at the end

Point being: doing filler content about scientific facts and listing them to a fact sheet page could prove itself synergistic and more useful the more it would grow.
 

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I would say your coverage is great. No site is out there saying it truthfully and honestly like you are at the DS. One thing that might be interesting is to connect the dots. We know so many things are connecting back to individual Jews, but few people know they are connecting back to not just individual Jews, but Jewish clans that have been doing these hoaxes for centuries.

What I mean is you focus on news as it hits, which is great and all, but tying into the narrative of the last 100-200-1000 years would be something to consider.
 

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But lately my writing hasn't been great, I don't think.
Sounds like you may need to look into the 4th Commandment.

I have trouble at times taking a day off from "work", but I can attest to the benefits of it and the fact that the human body was engineered with this "1 day out of every 7 for rest" principle as an optimal practice for energy, motivation, restoration, etc. It's interesting that God made this commandment fourth in line and if it wasn't so hard for us to do He wouldn't have made it a commandment.

There are a lot of statutes involved in the commandment that are fascinating but the main principle is rest. There's even thought to prepping meals for the day beforehand for optimal resting. In like manner, you can parse out your Sunday (or whatever day you want) work over the other 6 days and have it ready to go so you have that day free.

Giving specific time to study and worship is also obviously a big part of the weekly sabbath. You can set aside that time to focus on your study. Clown World will still be here when you get back.

Also, in regards to inspiration and ideas, give thought and prayer to it and read your Bible. Paul's letters come to mind as his Inspired attitude during the Clown World of his day is a great example for all of us about what's important during times of rampant lawlessness.

I also agree with everyone else on the general celebration/attention to our own counter culture because the future foundations for what will be mainstream is being put down now. From red pill aware men to post-boomer America to Bitcoin and so on. We're the future as far as culture goes.
 

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Lately the humor has felt forced as though you were trying to carry on your earlier tradition but your heart wasn't in it. That may not be what is happening but it is the impression I get from it. Each article still has something important though.

How you should write and what you should focus on all depends on what you want to achieve. It is interesting to read an article here then read it on Unz. On TDS it feels at home. On Unz, they feel a little more forced at times. Unz is a very earnest site for the most part. The flippant and edgy ones seemed to at first divert commentors from the substance and get them focused more on the style. That seems to be changing though. How much do you want to reach an Unz reader versus this site?

On this site I think we are all very clear as to what is happening and why it is happening. (Although I find the big picture analysis still very valuable.) For new visitors some of the traditional noticing needs to continue but I think there is a big need to get into the practical aspects of how do young and middle aged men make the move to safer rural, small town and remote suburban locations. Maybe an extension of Self Help Sunday.

There is a big problem that some of the locations most hospitable to us are being killed off economically. So how do you pick a location? Where are some of the best locations? what jobs should young and middle aged men have or train for to make that move? In a lot of these places new arrivals will be seen as an outsider for a long time so how do you build communities? But maybe that is beyond the scope of TDS and should be from commentors on the forum.
 
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Andrew, the fact that you’re asking for constructive criticism shows how mature you are and committed you are to us. Thank you for what you do. My husband and I would feel so alone and isolated if we didn’t have your articles on the DS and GU. We wake up everyday wondering what happened to our country. You answer that and give us hope. We love you.
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Your big picture articles are invaluable. You tie a lot of things that are going on together in a way which makes it obvious and undeniable - like Galileo's cosmology, which can't be unseen once it's seen. You are still reaching the clouds with your work.

Fewer articles, more filler, will be good if you can focus on big picture stuff.

Perhaps you can rehash multiple old article to give insights? It would be a benefit to us and perhaps it would save you time.
 

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I think that right now the time seems good for writing that comes from the heart but is a bit sloppy rather than over-editorializing or trying to force a particular style one isn't comfortable with.
 
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I don't start threads often, other than my article threads. I'm still going to finish the AMA I swear.

But lately my writing hasn't been great, I don't think. I've been doing self-criticism/analysis and it seems to have peaked.

Part of the problem is obviously just the state of the news cycle, and the fact that I'm trying to avoid totally unadulterated doom-mongering (which is my instinct right now).

I wanted to get some feedback from you all: what is good, what isn't good, what can be improved, topic suggestions, whatever.

For example, someone said they thought the recent article about that Jew Abramson trying to get Alex Jones arrested was too arduous. I can see that.

If you don't want to be negative, you can just say what you do like.

Also, I'm open to bringing back more edgy humor. I don't really want to do that, but maybe there's a way to do it that doesn't feel cringe.

I stopped with the edgy humor in large part because I don't want to become [REDACTED] or [REDACTED], who are two guys who are now in their 40s and 50s trying to do edgy stuff that was funny in the 1990s and now just comes across as pathetic.

Also, the fact is, I successfully pushed that stuff so hard that it was genuinely no longer shocking, which kind of defeated the point. There is a fed site that I won't link to that tried to rip off the use of racial slurs and then mix it with a neocon anti-Russia/China agenda, and I spent like an hour reading through it maybe a year and a half ago and was like "this is the worst thing I've ever seen." Aside from the fact it was pushing State Department talking points, it was 100% try-hard and 1000% cringe. So the slurs themselves are not just automatically funny anymore, and it largely feels like a dead meme.

However, being able to just say GAYNIGGER LOL was an easy goto for filler content.

The one thing that is still funny is talking about beating and raping women. That will always be shocking. But the ridiculous racist/Nazi stuff seems largely played out.

Oh, and I'm planning on doing some serious reading of old Christian material and writing about that, but that will just be a once a week thing probably (I'll likely publish Sundays and then collect it in book/pdf form).

I think some of the longer stuff is still pretty good, it's just the daily trudge that I'm struggling with.

I think I could hire some more people to do what Elvis/Snake are doing. Maybe they could do a better job than those two. For anyone who hasn't noticed, I write most of that text. They format the articles and sometimes add a few sentences. They only get paid a pittance. But it's not hard work.

Anyway, this post is becoming like a shitty article - so the thing: just give me some feedback. Don't be shy.
Andrew - just go with your gut and stay there. Nobody is perfect and you can't please everyone. But look at where you started and where you are now - you'd be making millions in a free Christian world.

So just stay true to yourself and don't beat yourself up - you're doing great.

And if you want real advice .... pray to the Almighty God to influence your thinking. Tell Him "Mi casa es tu casa".
 

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Andrew, the fact that you’re asking for constructive criticism shows how mature you are and committed you are to us. Thank you for what you do. My husband and I would feel so alone and isolated if we didn’t have your articles on the DS and GU. We wake up everyday wondering what happened to our country. You answer that and give us hope. We love you.
Give em all hell, the jews, the shitlibs, the demonrats, the sluts, the cuckservatives, lolbertarians, they deserve no mercy.
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I haven't read as much recently as I should to make a suggestion, but lately your writing doesn't have that arrogant, dominant, angry feel anymore. In all fairness, I don't either. This whole thing has gone from a triathlon to a torture session. We aren't trying to win, we are just gritting out a "no, fuck you" while kikes put jumper cables to our nuts.
 

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The one thing that is still funny is talking about beating and raping women.
Do a trilogy of raping and murdering Rebekah Mercer. One is you, two is her getting hooked up with Dodgers pitcher Trevor Bauer and three is Bekah getting anally railed by nigger porn stars before O.J. Simpson cuts her head off, puts her head in a box and mails it to Ted Cruz who is arrested for Bekah's murder.
 
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